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Poetry (which i dont usually write)

Discussion in 'Awesome Media' started by zero, Jan 25, 2005.

  1. zero

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    Poetry (which i dont usually write)

    I dont usually write poetry, but ive met someone that inspires me to do it. Its only ever written for her to see, but its late and im stoned.

    its not very good, but someone may kind of like it.



    When the mind wanders?..
    Thru daydreams and starry eyes
    With the clouds below us
    And our life before us
    Staring into the great beyond
    As the waves crash and the sands rescind
    An embrace of the lips
    And the universe gives way
    Closing a void
    And creating eternity
    Forever binding the souls out of darkness
    With the very fabric of existence
    In a cosmic explosion of the most beautiful kind
    Two lovers embark upon a journey thru time and space
     
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    Very good, good job man. I expect to see some more :)
     
  3. Madigan

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    Good Poem Zero.
    I can relate to muse inpired poetry. Love has a way of evoking the poet in many of us. helping us see things through psychedelic eyes so to speak.(sans drugs)

    Keep your muse alive and strong, and write when she moves you.
    Some of the world's greatest poems were written during the heights of passion, and some during the depths of despair.

    Keep on writing!
     
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    I personally do like it. Sort of a cool way you setup the universe theme, and then end it with "Two lovers embark upon a journey thru time and space". It works well in this poem.

    My favorite line is "As the waves crash and the sands rescind", for some reason I really like the word rescind there, and the reference to waves crashing and sands rescinding in comparison to love.

    Good job. Keep it up! ;)
     
  5. Davidk

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    Yeah rescind, kind of caught my attention, it's well written.
     
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    zero

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    thanks guys. wait til she leaves me, then ill have some really good work.
     
  7. Davidk

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    I can't wait!
     
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